Tuesday, November 10, 2009

In conclusion, this essay discussed two effects of the problem of speeding and give two solutions. the effects are roads accident and cars break and the solutions are take their cars and awareness in the t.v or radio. In my opinion, the speed is very dangerous for our life. I wish all people that don't speed up.
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  1. JonathanNovember 10, 2009 at 11:34 PM

    Good structure, and you would get a 4 or 5 out of five for this. There are some language problems, however:
    1) discussed. remember, use the present perfect when restating your thesis statement
    2) give. same thing.
    3) the should be capitalized
    4) roads accident has a problem with #
    5) take their cars - whose cars?
    6) I wish all people that don't speed up - this sentence is awkward and should be rewritten.

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